Cindy：Thanks for meeting with me,Professor King. I wanted to talk to you about my paper. I got a C, but I think I can do better. I'd like to get some advice and then rewrite it. 金教授，謝謝你跟我見面。我想跟你討論我的報告。我得了個C，可是我認為我可以做得更好。我想聽聽您的建議，然後重寫一次。
King：I'll be happy to help. That's why I asked you to come in. Revision is the most important part of the writing process. Your first draft is never your best. 我很樂意幫忙。那也是我叫妳來的原因。修改是寫作過程中最重要的一個部份。第一次的草稿絕對不會是最好的作品。
Cindy：Can you show me where I went wrong ? 你可以告訴我我哪裡出錯了嗎?
King： You have an interesting thesis- that book learning is no substitute for real life experience. And your discussion of Tom Sawyer and Socrates is lively and very original. 妳的論點很有意思- 書本上的知識無法取代實際生活經驗。而且妳對湯姆．索爾和蘇格拉底所做的討論很生動，也很有創意。
Cindy：Sounds like I should have got an A. 聽起來我應該拿A的。
King：The problem is that your paper lacks focus.You try to do too much. 問題在於妳的報告缺少重心。妳想寫的太廣泛了。
